Miriam Mendez

Isabella Roman

Isabella’s draft does include Aristotles’ 3 pain keypoints, pathos, logos, ethos. Pathos is seen throughout the essay but more specifically, it is shown through the personal stories/ evidence. It is seen on page 3. The evidence is less statistical and more emotional. Logos also known as logic is seen throughout the entire draft. Some changes that can be made are condensing the evidence and making it integrate into the paragraphs. That way it sounds better and flows better. For example, when saying “According to Doherty… 12 % of couples who go to a treatment stay together” one can say “Doherty and … believe couples therapy is a positive way to be in a healthy relationship since “‘12% of couples who go to a treatment stay together’(Doherty, Harris, Wilde 252)”. Ethos is seen throughout the essay especially in pages 4 and 5. The thesis is clearly stated at the end of the conclusion. The “hook” could be more interesting with asking questions to grab the reader’s attention or in this case a scenario. Other than the obvious, I liked the topic and everything was easily understandable and interesting. I like how the evidence is clearly stated as well as the works cited. 

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